Re: 4th draft up -- get your comments in! - Mailing list pgsql-advocacy

From Bernard Clement
Subject Re: 4th draft up -- get your comments in!
Date
Msg-id 200510071254.49937.bernard.clement@b2b2c.ca
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In response to Re: 4th draft up -- get your comments in!  (Josh Berkus <josh@agliodbs.com>)
Responses Re: 4th draft up -- get your comments in!
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Josh,

My pinch of salt about the usage of "enhanced" and "improved".  You can also
used "better" and "superior".  All those 4 words are synonyms.

IMHO, it is not too bad to use a certain word twice and I will let be like it
is.

Bernard

PS Hoping that my message will go through...I do not remember with which email
address I subscribed.

On Friday 07 October 2005 12:40, Josh Berkus wrote:
> Lance,
>
> > Only one nitpick.  In the features section, we twice say the feature is
> > for 8.1.  That seems  implied to me.  I recommend dropping the clause
> > "for 8.1" in "the buffer manager for 8.1 has..." and "in version 8.1," in
> > "in version 8.1, the query planner is ..."
>
> OK, I'll take a look.   I'm a little more concerned about the fact that
> I use the words "enhanced" and "improved" at least 6 times each, and
> "refactored" twice.   Bonus points for anyone who can find ways to
> replace some of these!
>
> Also, Lance, I thought I had an "about Pervasive" on file, but I don't
> seem to.   Can you get me the 4 line version?  Thanks!
>
> --Josh
>
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